Saturday, 18 September 2010

The Hair Dye - Saturday Centus # 20

Week 20 of Saturday Centus this weeks prompt is to use up to 100 words (not including the prompt) using the line "This is never going to come out," she thought as she scrubbed the spot on the worn carpet ...


"This is never going to come out," she thought as she scrubbed the spot on the worn carpet.

Looking up at him she tried desperately not to laugh.

He looked back, his face deathly serious.

"Look Tom, they're just going to take one look and know... this spot on the carpet's not going to give the game away!"

He sighed, "I suppose you're right, I chose the wrong one didn't I?"

She allowed herself to smile ... just a little.

"Well if you were looking to subtly blend in the grey .... Raven Black wasn't the best choice!"

28 comments:

Kat said...

What a cute take on the prompt. I especially loved " tried desperately not to laugh". Egos are fragile things :)

myorii said...

Funny! Wow, using Black to subtly blend in grey... No wonder she was trying hard not to laugh :)

Viki said...

This was good. I'd really like to know about these two characters.

Anna said...

This was fun. Men do have a different sence of colour. (a lot of them are colour blind.)

Thank you for your kind words on my post.

You are 'First Commenter' and get an extra link to your blog from my post.

Best wishes,
Anna
For the benefit of other readers:
Anna's SC-Week-20

Sue said...

heehee

=D

Bookie said...

Wow, this was an original...funny too!

My name is PJ. said...

MWAHAHAHAHA!!!

jfb57 said...

Oh bless! Just goes to prove men ARE clour blind!

Terra said...

Ok, I am a loser. I am lost, I read it three times (because sometimes I miss things) what game? ARGH...I am so mad at myself...others seem to get it...just not me.

June Freaking Cleaver said...

A lot of men just don't "do" subtle...

Your story is a permanent reminder of that trait.

Stef said...

Taheeheehee

Susannah said...

I love how you captured the situation with his deathly serious face and her doing her best not to laugh! :-)

Great writing and very nice use of the prompr.

RA said...

Awsome! I don't know how you do it with so few words.... :D

Deborah said...

Thank you all for the comments, I really enjoyed reading all of your SC's too x

Tgoette said...

Oh, us poor, color-blind, addle-minded men! I count it a daily miracle that you wonderful women even take the time to chat with us. LOL!

Funny story! Great use of the prompt!

Brian Miller said...

hehe. i have seen quite a few bad dye jobs...think i will just embrace my grey...nice write...

Rinkly Rimes said...

I would find it so hard to submit to a word-count discipline! But you do it so effortlessly!

Jingle said...

super creative post.

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Jessica B said...

Great one! Love how easily you use a few words to convey so much.
Love it!

jeff campbell said...

Fine writing, but I am lost as to what is going on...but then I stay 'lost'...Peace and blessings

~Lissa said...

Ok, I was a little confused like some of the other but I think I got it.

He dyed his hair poorly and some dye got on the floor, right?

Despite being confused at first I still really enjoyed the back and forth of the characters. It seemed really organic and real.

Tina said...

i was a little confused at first too sorry! but thats the beauty of a 100 words it keeps you guessing doesent it ;)

Tina

Jenny said...

Love it! Totally love it. I must think a bit more obscurely like you because I read 'vanity game' into what you wrote.

And that's what I'm sticking with cuz I like the way that slant feels in this story.

Clever writing!

So neat to see you here!

Deborah said...

Thanks Jenny, they're always a pleasure to do, thank you for doing the prompts for us all :o)

Anna said...

Sara Cat sends purrs.


Sara Cat's SC-Week-20

cj Schlottman said...

Clever, I say, very clever! I laughed because she couldn't, and laugh I did. This is so visual. I can see the ugly spot and the look of torment on his face. Good writing!

Thanks..........cj

Deborah said...

Thank you all everso much for stopping by and for your lovely comments x :o)