Sheep file the corridor
mirror, follow
fingertips stripped
imitating their muse.
I yearn for passion
raw
to be thrust upon them
strengthen their verve.
Dispel this omen
that they may see
the oceans
the heavens
the fire -
the limitless beauty
in a single
solitary opal.
Written for wordle 22
at The Sunday Whirl
41 comments:
i am all about an invasion of passion to wake the sheep...that is for sure...smiles.
I love this clever and very astute observation. Really well wordled. :-)
I do think one CAN see "limitless beauty in a single solitary opal." Nicely crafted wordle.
Gorgeous write. Baaaa..baaa. I hope they don't eat the opal after gazing upon it's beauty. :) Thanks for writing with us at the whirl.
Beautiful Deborah....
That is beautiful.
What a great wordle!
I love the first four lines and the beautiful image you leave us with, Deborah!
~laurie
This was lovely Deborah! Well done. :)
i like the passionate yearning.. and yes to see all ~
Strengthen their verve - I feel the force. Dispel this omen - ah sounds magical! Thanks for dropping by my nook.
Holy caterpillar uprising, Deborah! This is brilliant!
Oh, wow. Good eye. Good eye.
Really good wordling. Enjoyable, too.
You did such a good job with the words, I found myself sucking and savoring them, like a good lifesaver!
Focusing on the opal made the perfect theme. This difficult wordle is bringing out everyone’s best.
One line building on the nest to a beautiful climax!
Deborah...
This Rocked!!
The ending has a wonderful beauty.
You make this one look so simple and easy. Fantastic flow and wonderful insight. Opals are a favorite of mine,
Elizabeth
I agree with Brian. I like the way you use opal as a metaphor in encompassing the mosaic-type beauty within a single world.
Thank you all everso much for visiting, and for all your lovely comments :o) x
'the limitless beauty' - what a beautiful phrase:-)
:o) Thank you jabblog x
I think I get it. I'm not sure how to read that "Dispel this omen" line. Is it dispelling the omen that they see - or is it dispelling an omen so that they "may see"? I think it works both ways, but the meanings are different - or am I reading too much into it?
Richard
So they 'may see', you've got me pondering it now! LOL Thanks for the thoughtful comment Richard :o) x
Deborah, a nice tight piece of writing. Perfect use of the words.
Pamela
Thank you Pamela :o) x
This is one of the best things you've written. Such clarity. Hope they strengthen their verve.
I love that you made this wordle about opals. There is a beautiful fire in a "solitary opal!"
Thank you everso much for your lovely comments Selma and Marianne xx
Shimmering gem of a poem, Deborah. Well written.
You did wonderfully well with the words!
while the instrument plays
Thank you everso much Tracy and Guatami :o) xx
love it this
the limitless beauty
in a single
solitary opal.
captures the beauty of a opal and one these I'll get one
:o) Thank you Cathy x
passion - fires up our lives.
you created a subtle picture
the sheep being perfect for
your poem's thought.
Thank you Shauna :o) x
lovely words...nicely crafted lines!
Thank you Kalyan :o) x
Wow. This is some seriously great writing. Loved this.
Thank you Jenny :o) x
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