Thursday, 9 September 2010

Wall - Thursday Think Tank Prompt 14

Poets United holds a weekly poetry prompt.
The Thursday Think Tank
This weeks prompt word is
WALL

You found my barriers
and dismantled them
carefully
one by one
and then
you reached that wall
it was solid
unmoving
too high for you to climb
so you sat at its base
with me
quietly 
and understood
till the mortar wore thin
then gently
brick by brick
you lowered the wall
until you saw me
 all of me
standing there
unprotected
but safe
 and you smiled

17 comments:

Systematic Weasel said...

Creating a door inside the wall, trumping the statement, a wall is not a door. Excellently crafted post!

-Weasel

Lynette Killam said...

Oh, I love this poem! The gentle patience of love that waits quietly, earning your trust by gentle measures, not breaking down walls..realizing the time will come when walls no longer seem necessary..wonderful!

Sherry Blue Sky said...

Wow, this is wonderful! The DISMANTLING of a wall. I love that he sat there with you and listened and understood......and smiled. Wonderful poem! SO well done!

signed...bkm said...

I really like the patience and the willingness to dismantle that wall to find that inner core of you...bkm

Maya said...

you are lucky to have someone have the patience to do that! 3 cheers to him/her and you !!

oilunderneath said...

If only senor Richi had patience as such....I somewhat envy the "romeo" in your piece. Guys got styyyyyyyyyyyle.

Diane T said...

Patient waiting! Good lesson, we all have to be patient!

Eileen T O'Neill ..... said...

Faced with an obstacle in life,although difficult, sometimes patience is rewarded...

Excellent words.
Eileen

RiikaInfinityy said...

Wow, perfectly written =D~ love your words<3

ninotaziz said...

Only the lucky...only if you open your heart.

Lovely.

flaubert said...

Deb I love the breakthrough you wrote here!
Pamela

Jingle said...

your words draw readers instantly,
beautiful and lovely poem!

my wall entry

Just Me said...

Beautiful poem. I enjoyed the feeling of patience and love.

Carrie Burtt said...

Deborah this is wonderfully written! Thank you for all your sweet comments at both my blogs!
:-)

Deborah said...

Thank you so much for your comments everyone, they're much appreciated x

Ellie said...

I love the way you showed the vulnerability and finally being exposed. The fear was faced, so one could be free~ Great job~

Deborah said...

Thank you Ellie x :o)