Monday, 11 October 2010

I Wake

I wake,
my mind pouring
through files of memories
placing each one at random,
unannounced, fresh before my eyes in
 the shadow of night, to be seen with more detail, 
more clarity than ever before, and I'm lost in a world 
of unwanted thoughts, spiraling inward in spite of me,
proficient, ruthless, finding just  the right nerve to
tap and draw, then I feel your hand rest on the
small of my back, unnaturally warm like
summer, and I breathe, and the 
darkness retreats as the 
files close, secured,
banished inspite 
of me, and I
close my


Strummed Words said...

Absolutely lovely, in shape and thought.

Mary said...

Nicely expressed poem about the thoughts that can interfere before one eventually sleeps!

senderupwords said...

I love the way you write ;) Love and Light, Sender

Jinksy said...

Crumbs! Wish I could find a magic hand like that! :)

gospelwriter said...

This is incredibly beautiful - the form gets me first of all, and then the content: the unease, the touch, the breath... I love darkness retreats as the / files close...

Deborah said...

Thank you everso much for your comments x

She said...

Love the format and the calm and peaceful end. I can relate to those unwanted thoughts!

Mama Zen said...

Perfectly done!

Sherry Blue Sky said...

Beautiful! Lovely experience, beautifully worded and the poem looks so good on the page. Well done.

Lisa Ricard Claro said...

Lovely! Very well done.

Eileen T O'Neill ..... said...

A lovely read with a very peaceful and contented ending...
Lovely words..

Best wishes,

Rashmi said...

Beautiful shape poem about sleep..

jaerose said...

I am glad I returned to see your heart of words..oh to fall asleep feeling loved and warm as summer..Jae

Deborah said...

Thank you for popping by and commenting, I really appreciate it x

thanatosis said...

very lovely one!

Jingle said...

your talent is unbeatable!

Olivia said...

what a stunning onion shape we have here.. we called it OG back in college.. equally inspiring words here

Deborah said...

Thank you all so much for your lovely comments x :o)