Saturday, 9 October 2010

Looking - Writers Island # 24.

Writer's Island  prompt this week envision and this image


She would look in the mirror
hoping to see
but the image would blur and distort
and they would find her looking 
and looking
and she couldn't remember 
when it happened
but there was a moment
when the mirror
reflected
and she saw 
someone 
holding her gaze
looking back
and she felt
a tear prick her eye
and as it fell
she smiled

18 comments:

Mary said...

Deborah, it seems that someone was blind and then suddenly began to see. Could apply to so many life situations. Nice work!

Ther said...

nice one. i can picture the character in my mind clearly.

Systematic Weasel said...

Wonderful take on the prompt! Loved the ending! =)

-Weasel

Diane T said...

I love the poem AND the shape of the poem. Almost like a tear drop?

anthonynorth said...

I found this quite poignant. Excellent.

vivinfrance said...

What a lovely optimistic/happy ending poem.

nimaruichi said...

Want to know more about Her. Glad it ends with her smile.

Susannah said...

Nice writing!

Elizabeth said...

Trying to see oneself is a life-time journey. Glad to know she made it,

Elizabeth

irene said...

Who looks back at you in the mirror? It changes doesn't it?

shanegenziuk said...

Nicely worded. I wonder if the next time she looks back and its distorted again?

Deborah said...

Thank you everso for your comments x

gospelwriter said...

this is so beautiful - like coming finally to the recognition of one's own worthiness or place in the world...

Tilly Bud said...

Nice interpretation of the prompt; so many are gloomy.

senderupwords said...

This is a wonderful use of the prompt. Love and Light, Sender

Rashmi said...

As always I love what you write and how you write..very nice take on the prompt..

Jingle said...

love happy endings, what a fantastic realization!

Deborah said...

Thank you all so much for your lovely comments x :o)