Wednesday 20 October 2010

Mirror - Magpie Tales # 37

Magpie Tales  hosts a weekly writing prompt, write a small vignette or poem using the photo below as your inspiration.

She lay on the bed, swaddling the sheets around her, the mirror beside.
Tears burned from her eyes in a familiar silent stream.
Grabbing the mirror she hurled it across the room, shards of glass splintering and fracturing.
Rushing in, he gathered her in his arms holding her tight, holding her together.
Cradling her face and looking deep into her eyes, he whispered,
"I wish you could see what I see."

29 comments:

Rashmi said...

Nice take of the prompt, Deborah

Susannah said...

Full of emotion, I loved the line 'holding her together'. Nice Magpie.

Anonymous said...

Nice post Deborah

Jinksy said...

Ho hum! What could she see? You got me wondering...

Gabriela Abalo said...

Brilliant!!!
Nice she got him to hold her and love her :)

Giovanni said...

Wow...that beautiful!

Jingle said...

beautiful imagery.

kathi harris said...

Glad he was there 4 her.

Unknown said...

show her..show her what you see!

Business IQ said...

This made me want to quick working late, and go home and kiss my husband deeply. Thank you.

Reflections said...

Love the imagery and 'holding her together'. Nivvely written

* said...

Others see in us what we cannot see in ourselves. Such truth in this Magpie!

Marilyn & Jeff said...

This is very emotional; so good she has him.

Deborah said...

Thank you everso much for the comments x

Priyanka Bhowmick said...

loved the depth in the last line. good prompt

Amanda Moore said...

very romance novel like, is there scene 2? would love to keep reading this!

Kathe W. said...

Beautifully written- holding her together.

Shail Raghuvanshi said...

Nice take off this Magpie Deborah!

Anonymous said...

Good one. We judge ourselves so harshly, until we learn better. So lucky if we have someone who sees truer.

Anonymous said...

Great Mag. Love and Light, Sender

Ana said...

Others rarely see what we see. Beautiful!

Brian Miller said...

he is a wise soul...and i wish she could as well...smiles.

Claudia said...

oh - this is so full of warmth - glad she had someone like him...loved this

signed...bkm said...

so beautiful, yet the sadness of a person who is so hard on themselves, we all are so beautiful inside if we just embrace it....bkm

Dave King said...

A good slant on a difficult (I thought) prompt.

Anonymous said...

Emotional, tempestuous, full of anguish and self-recrimination. You completed a full and powerful scene so concisely. Very well written.

christine said...

Poor thing to be so wracked with anguish I wish she could see what he could see as well!

Tess Kincaid said...

We never quite see ourselves as others can. Excellent.

Deborah said...

Thank you so much for stopping by and for your comments x :o)