Wednesday, 16 March 2011

His Girl - Three Word Wednesday

He smiled as the breeze swept the hair from her face.
The sun was shining, lighting her eyes, making them twinkle, blue as the summer sky.
He leant over, his fingers wriggling in a gesture to tickle her side, making her laugh aloud.
The sound had never failed to make him smile. The years had simply added to it, rich and mellow and filled with joy. It made his heart skip a beat every time he heard it.

"I'll race you," he said, thumb ready on the accelerator of his mobility scooter.

She didn't wait, pressing hers, she shot off in front.

"You'll have to catch me!" she called.

He pressed his thumb and gave chase, a smile emblazoned across his face as he chased his girl up the high street, heading for home.


Three Word Wednesday where you write something using the three prompt words.   This week's words are ... Breeze, Mellow and Tickle.

42 comments:

anthonynorth said...

A lovely story. Enjoyed that.

Rashmi said...

Wonderful use of prompt words...such a wonderful story ...we can visualize the whole scene....the laughter ,race .... brilliant...

jaerose said...

There must be something about spring and mobility scooters! Loved this piece Deborah..'you' are always somebody's 'little girl'..no matter if your pins give out..absolute 'joie de vivre'..Jae

Jingle said...

fun read.
Happy Wednesday...

Fear Not the Darkness but What lies Within said...

Sheilagh Lee said: this piece was light breezy and full of sweetness.Well done.It made me smile.

Tarang said...

You've captured a lively moment very well.

therummaker said...

I can feel the raw energy, I love this kind of writeups

Elaine said...

So light and "breezy" and upbeat. A nice read for a Wednesday morning!

Leetid said...

Thanks for stopping by my blog.

Your story made me smile, it is very sweet.

Christine said...

Beautiful, I imagine a youthfulness here, despite the scooter telling me otherwise.

VL Sheridan said...

Oh Deborah this is wonderful. I hope they race each other for many more years. Well done!

The Rusty Pen said...

What a sweet story. Enjoyed reading it.

trisha said...

beautiful and heart warming. loved the scene you created.

Deborah said...

Thank you everso much for your lovely comments x :o)

sefcug said...

A really fun read.

I also liked the way you worked the words into the story.

Susannah said...

Almost bought tears to my eyes. A really wonderful story, I loved it.

earlybird said...

lovely! I didn't read it right first time and missed that it was a 'mobility scooter'. Great touch

Old Altonian said...

Charming tale, charmingly told.

Kim Nelson said...

Wonderfully romantic and upbeat. Love this!
Here's mine:
http://www.kimnelsonwrites.com/2011/03/16/lucky-to-call-you-friend/

oldegg said...

What a great post. There is certainly no need to to lose the "joie de vivre" at any age.

Kylie said...

Very sweet. I could really see this as I read.

PAMO said...

Sweet!

Mamma has spoken said...

I am laughing hard at this just because this is how my sons describe hubby and I.

Mama Zen said...

This is so sweet!

Ren Thompson said...

Smiling over here :)

Deborah said...

Thank you again everyone for your lovely comments x :o)

shail said...

What a joy-filled story :)

http://shailsnest.com/wp/challenge/i-still-burn/

Linda said...

You're very talented, to come up with such a lovely piece of writing based on the three "prompt" words you were given. It made me smile because, although we're not on scooters yet, my hubby and I occasionally engage in a footrace. At our ages, it's not pretty...but it's fun.

rmpWritings said...

you captured such a sweet moment so well that i couldn't help but smile along with him.

The Poetry Bin said...

I too enjoyed your short story :) Thank you

The Poetry Bin

Deborah said...

Thank you so much for your lovely comments x :o)

jabblog said...

This is lovely, Deborah. True love doesn't count the years or the wrinkles. True lovers are forever young in their hearts.

Deborah said...

Thank you jabblog x
I couldn't agree more :o)

Raven said...

I swear I commented on this one already. Hmmm... Anyway, I love this piece, it's so fun and free. Just lovely!!

cj Schlottman said...

This poem is very visual and in the moment. I like it a lot!

Deborah said...

Thank you cj and Raven x :o)

J Cosmo Newbery said...

Love the images!

Deborah said...

Thank you J Cosmo Newbery x :o)

Elizabeth said...

Love this. What a wonderful little tale with a depth of meaning,

Elizabeth

Deborah said...

Thank you Elizabeth x :o)

trisha said...

heartwarming and beautiful deborah.

Deborah said...

Thank you Trisha x :o)