Thursday, 26 August 2010

Water - Thursday Think Tank Prompt 12

Poets United holds a weekly poetry prompt.
The Thursday Think Tank
This weeks prompt word is
W A T E R

Your love
was an ocean
that washed
away my past
no troubled heart
no hurts to moan
I stood 
smoothed and breathless
  quenched
and I smiled
and I laughed
and I travelled your seas
where the stars would shine
and where sunsets lasted
forever.

21 comments:

Nessa said...

Beautiful. It flows like gentle waves on the shore.

Pan said...

"and I smiled
and I laughed
and I travelled your seas
where the stars would shine
and where sunsets lasted
forever"

Just beaufigul! I look forward to reading more of your poetry.

Lynette Killam said...

How lovely, Deborah! You and I were on a similar page with this one, weren't we?

So glad I stopped by, and I do like the name of your blog!!

Lynette

Mary said...

What a beautiful and sweet poem!

ninotaziz said...

Hi Deboraah,
I do sense a crescendo building up to land gently on an illusive concept like forever...lovely!

Deborah said...

Thank you so much for your lovely comments :o) x

Sherry Blue Sky said...

Oh this is so beautiful! I know that feeling when standing beside the sea, it must be amazing to feel that way with an actual human:) Lovely poem, so well written!

dcwright02 said...

very lovely poem... i love the serene ending. keep up the great work!

Diane T said...

A lovely poem of love! I hope what "was" is "is."

Sherry Blue Sky said...

The way this poem looks on the page is wonderful! I have never tried a shaped poem.......the words are so beautiful..........I especially love the last lines "where the stars would shine and sunsets lasted forever." So beautiful!

Friko said...

This is my first visit and I love what I see.
I shall be back for sure.

Maya said...

very nice... i do looove the title of your blog... Caterpillar uprising sounds so happily militant !! :)

Herb Alyètte said...

Very soothing, top stuff.

And welcome to Poets United!

Herb Alyette.

Paul Andrew Russell said...

A great response to the prompt. I especially liked these lines...

'and I travelled your seas
where the stars would shine
and where sunsets lasted
forever'

Deborah said...

It's been lovely to meet you all and thank you again for the warm welcome and your all of your comments :o)

Eileen T O'Neill ..... said...

A wonderful oceanic feel and view, from your very emotive words. A superb piece of writing.
Best wishes, Eileen

Following your blog!

Ellie said...

This reminds me of the gentle waves lapping the shore! Well done~

Dasuntoucha said...

...Your love
was an ocean
that washed
away my past
...

...beautiful lines...

Elizabeth said...

A wonderful love song, and so satisfying.

Elizabeth

rashmi said...

Nice poem .Smart way of writing..How you write shape poems I always wonder..Just like the waves of words touching the shore and going back..Thanks for making us read by submitting...

Deborah said...

Thank you all everso much for stopping by and for your lovely comments x :o)