Monday, 27 September 2010

Microfiction Monday # 50

This weeks picture prompt from Microfiction Monday at Stony River
The task: a tweetable 140 characters or fewer inspired by the picture below...

She sat alone with the sky and the ocean
and for the first time in her life
she felt she belonged.

or

She couldn't wait for the ship and the boats to go by
so she could get her kit off and jump in!

29 comments:

fickleinpink said...

i love the second one! :) maybe because the first one hits close to home...

beautiful!


xoxo,
Fickle

(My first time to do Microfiction and it's FUN!)

Ellie said...

The second one is hilarious! But I enjoyed them both.

Have a great week x

Jinksy said...

The second version does it for me! LOL :)

Susannah said...

Brilliant! lol I love them both. :-)

Madeleine said...

Brilliant I love the juxtasposition of the two.

It sounds as though she was in two minds whether to feel reflective or daring :O)

Greyscale Territory said...

I totally relate to the first micro! I feel that I am very connected with the sea! And the second drama is a great little drama!

SouthLakesMom said...

Skinny dippin in the sound -- brrr! Sounds like she's eager though!

Good job!

Bill ~ {The Old Fart} said...

I liked both but had my Morning Chuckle with the Second one.

Monica Manning said...

Excellent, Deborah. But, like everyone else, I loved the second one most. I think we all have a bit of that wild spirit in us. Or perhaps we all remember what it was like to run around starkers when mum took our diaper off. (I've become addicted to the microwriting on Twitter!).

Carolina said...

The skinny dipping thought took over my mind ;-) But I like both microfictions.

˙·٠•●❤Sh@KiR@ ❤●•٠·˙ said...

I love BOTH attempts!
Well done!

Mine is up

Have you a Blessed Week!
hugs
shakira

Book Bird Dog said...

I like both stories, especially the second one!

David said...

I like them both. If I had to chose, I like the first one more I guess.

Priyanka Bhowmick said...

Both are beautiful but I felt the first one touching!

quilly said...

I know I feel at one with the sea and the sky when I visit that spot, however in regard to your number two story -- if your lady jumps in the water there it will make her feel at one with an ice cube!

G-Man said...

Pensive and Serene...
Great Job!

gospelwriter said...

love the first one especially - I know that feeling well...

Diane said...

Those two could not have any more of different vibes to them. Great! :O)

septembermom said...

Poetically beautiful. Well done.

John's comments said...

the saucy version naturally My 140 Hope your week goes well

Thom said...

Excellent my friend. The second one is so funny :) Have a great Monday :)

Michael G-G said...

From the sublime to the... well, chilly, I suppose. Loved the range you showed with both!

Have a great week.

hope said...

It's been so hot and dry here, even ice cube cold sounds good. :)

Suz said...

Oh feeling part of creation ...fabulous!

sylviamorice said...

The first one pulled at my heart-strings...but they were both good.
Have a great week. Cheers!

Pat said...

I like both of these--one is contemplative and one is funny and slightly risque'

Well done.

sioux Roslawski said...

Alone with the sea and the sky...What a great image.

Nessa said...

I too like them both but the second one was very funny.

Deborah said...

Thank you all so much for stopping by and for your lovely comments x :o)