Sunday, 18 September 2011

Opal

Sheep file the corridor
mirror,  follow
fingertips stripped
imitating their muse.
I yearn for passion
raw
to be thrust upon them
strengthen their verve.
Dispel this omen
that they may see
the oceans
the heavens
the fire -
the limitless beauty
in a single
solitary opal.






Written for wordle 22
at The Sunday Whirl

41 comments:

Brian Miller said...

i am all about an invasion of passion to wake the sheep...that is for sure...smiles.

Susannah said...

I love this clever and very astute observation. Really well wordled. :-)

Mary said...

I do think one CAN see "limitless beauty in a single solitary opal." Nicely crafted wordle.

brenda w said...

Gorgeous write. Baaaa..baaa. I hope they don't eat the opal after gazing upon it's beauty. :) Thanks for writing with us at the whirl.

Rashmi said...

Beautiful Deborah....

Daydreamertoo said...

That is beautiful.
What a great wordle!

lkkolp said...

I love the first four lines and the beautiful image you leave us with, Deborah!

~laurie

Elizabeth Grimes said...

This was lovely Deborah! Well done. :)

Heaven said...

i like the passionate yearning.. and yes to see all ~

Hazel said...

Strengthen their verve - I feel the force. Dispel this omen - ah sounds magical! Thanks for dropping by my nook.

Sandra said...

Holy caterpillar uprising, Deborah! This is brilliant!

That Janie Girl said...

Oh, wow. Good eye. Good eye.

vivinfrance said...

Really good wordling. Enjoyable, too.

annell said...

You did such a good job with the words, I found myself sucking and savoring them, like a good lifesaver!

Mike Patrick said...

Focusing on the opal made the perfect theme. This difficult wordle is bringing out everyone’s best.

Janet said...

One line building on the nest to a beautiful climax!

G-Man said...

Deborah...
This Rocked!!

irene said...

The ending has a wonderful beauty.

Elizabeth said...

You make this one look so simple and easy. Fantastic flow and wonderful insight. Opals are a favorite of mine,

Elizabeth

Ravenblack said...

I agree with Brian. I like the way you use opal as a metaphor in encompassing the mosaic-type beauty within a single world.

Deborah said...

Thank you all everso much for visiting, and for all your lovely comments :o) x

jabblog said...

'the limitless beauty' - what a beautiful phrase:-)

Deborah said...

:o) Thank you jabblog x

Mr. Walker said...

I think I get it. I'm not sure how to read that "Dispel this omen" line. Is it dispelling the omen that they see - or is it dispelling an omen so that they "may see"? I think it works both ways, but the meanings are different - or am I reading too much into it?

Richard

Deborah said...

So they 'may see', you've got me pondering it now! LOL Thanks for the thoughtful comment Richard :o) x

flaubert said...

Deborah, a nice tight piece of writing. Perfect use of the words.

Pamela

Deborah said...

Thank you Pamela :o) x

Selma said...

This is one of the best things you've written. Such clarity. Hope they strengthen their verve.

Marianne said...

I love that you made this wordle about opals. There is a beautiful fire in a "solitary opal!"

Deborah said...

Thank you everso much for your lovely comments Selma and Marianne xx

Traci B said...

Shimmering gem of a poem, Deborah. Well written.

gautami tripathy said...

You did wonderfully well with the words!

while the instrument plays

Deborah said...

Thank you everso much Tracy and Guatami :o) xx

cathy said...

love it this

the limitless beauty
in a single
solitary opal.

captures the beauty of a opal and one these I'll get one

Deborah said...

:o) Thank you Cathy x

Shauna said...

passion - fires up our lives.

you created a subtle picture
the sheep being perfect for
your poem's thought.

Deborah said...

Thank you Shauna :o) x

Kalyan said...

lovely words...nicely crafted lines!

Deborah said...

Thank you Kalyan :o) x

Jenny said...

Wow. This is some seriously great writing. Loved this.

Deborah said...

Thank you Jenny :o) x