Tuesday, 4 October 2011

Carry Me Far

Away to the Sky by beloavaan at deviantART

 Carry me far 
let me sleep above ancient cities
away from bustle and noise
and incessant living.
From halogen lighting 
that startles eyes I long to close
tight shut
To be allowed to dream among clouds
and silent softness.
Please carry me far
so I may escape
for just a while.


Poets United Tuesday Midnight Snack Picture Prompt

43 comments:

Susannah said...

Beautiful!

I particularly loved

"Carry me far
let me sleep above ancient cities
away from bustle and noise
and incessant living."

and. . .

To be allowed to dream among clouds
and silent softness.

Wonderful, I loved it.

jabblog said...

What a delicious thought. The lines Susannah chose are the ones that enchanted me too.

That gentleman's lady said...

What wonderful words you weave to go with that image!

Mamma has spoken said...

Beautifully written! Love how you sum up the issues of living in a big city.

Christine said...

awesome sentiments, so wish I was that girl this moment, loved this photo prompt,will have to try it out

Kerry O'Connor said...

cablygeiThis picture is really so beautiful and your words do it full justice. I guess we'd all like to be ballooned away from the bustle and noise some days.

Thank you for sharing your poem on Real Toads.

Mystic_Mom said...

I'm enchanted! I want to go! Love this.

Janet said...

I also like 'from halogen lighting that startles eyes...'
This is very beautiful, touching the senses.

Deborah said...

Thank you everso much everyone for your lovely comments, I really appreciate them :o) x

Brian Miller said...

ah we resonate a bit on the topic of escape...yoursa bit more gentle than mine...smiles. nice write...

Sherry Blue Sky said...

I, too, loved "let me sleep above ancient cities".......beautiful.

gautami tripathy said...

Escape, wish I could do that! Wonderfully put.


a song, this is?

Titus said...

Beautiful union between image and words. And yes, I would love to join her.

Kay L. Davies said...

Oh, how well I understand "incessant living"! Non-stop hustle and bustle wears me out.
Very, very well done.

Kay, Alberta, Canada
An Unfittie’s Guide to Adventurous Travel

Catherine said...

I like it!

I think we all wish we could be carried away now and then. If even for a short while.

Lovely!

xo Catherine

Selma said...

I can really relate to this - the sense of longing, the desire for freedom and maybe a bit of peace are beautifully expressed. Carry me far..... gorgeous!

Old Raven said...

Oddly, I found this to be very tender. I really liked it a lot.

Kenia Cris said...

Yes, I know what you mean. I also need someone to carry me far sometimes. Beautifully written. <3

Deborah said...

Thank you for stopping by everyone and for your lovely comments :o) x

turtlememoir said...

I hear you - I feel the same at times, the "bustle and noise / and incessant living" do get to one. Lovely combination, the words and photo.

fallenelegy said...

beautiful dreamy visions. enchanting. does justice to the prompt

Mike Patrick said...

A brief escape is all we need to clear the head, and that beautiful prompt brought that out perfectly.

Al Penwasser said...

Beautiful poem!
Once Upon a midnight dreary
as I pondered, weak and weary.
I closed my eyes
and drifted to sleep.
Soon I came to realize
I was floating up in the skies.
No worries, no panic, no slips.
For I had balloons around my hips.
The End

Rashmi said...

What a beautiful vision...sleeping above ancient cities...beautiful...

Deborah said...

Thank you all everso much for your wonderful comments ... and poem! lol They're a real pleasure to read :o) xxx

WonderWall said...

Outstanding creation... Each line and word is beautifully paced.

Like it.

Deborah said...

Thank you Wonderwall :o) x

zongrik said...

Yeah, I like how you caught the ancient cities.

Deborah said...

Thanks zongrik :o) x

Linda said...

I suspect that every one of us has wished we might "escape for just a while" at times during our "incessant living." You've captured our longing in your lovely poem.

Deborah said...

:o) Thank you Linda x

Dave King said...

Ah, me! I guess that's for most of us. Beautifully executed.

Deborah said...

Thank you Dave :o) x

Lydia said...

Deborah! This is absolutely beautiful. Bringing "halogen lighting" into the fray made it so real for me. I love this poem.

Deborah said...

:o) Thank you Lydia x

Reflections said...

Wonderful piece, your words truly carry the image to new boundaries.

Deborah said...

Thank you Reflections :o) x

Cяystal said...

What a beaaaaautiful flow of words, and such a sweet picture to compliment it. **away from bustle and noise
and incessant living.
Wish the SAME.
I loved the second post on your blog too. Shall be here oftener now :)

Deborah said...

Thank you Crystal, I look forward to seeing you again x :o)

Tarang Sinha said...

This is nice:)

Deborah said...

Thank you Tarang :o) x

Other Mary said...

Oh, that's really lovely...carry me far away too please!

Deborah said...

Thank you Mary :o) x