Sunday, 9 October 2011

Her Little King

image: Michael Sowa, from The Little King

She watched the little fat King
as she stirred her coffee.
He pulled at the newspaper
regally flipping the pages,
reading aloud choice pieces.
His gown sweeping text,
scepter pointing out gems,
ones to make her smile.
She sipped at the coffee,
her fourth.
Another sleepless night
spent alone - but for him.
He was a cheerful little fellow
no airs or graces
always appearing
when she needed him most.
As she swallowed her last sip
he took off his crown
and placed it on her finger.
It sparkled and glowed
sending a warm feeling surging through her,
till it disappeared -
along with her King.
And she yawned sleepily
eyes growing tired
and took herself back to bed.

Magpie Tales prompt Mag 86.

52 comments:

anthonynorth said...

Quite a night. Great words.

Friko said...

If she can sleep after all that coffee she's a miracle!

Fun poem, it reads very realistically. Perhaps you have experienced this state of affairs?

Susannah said...

A wonderful, magical little tale. I loved it. :-)

shonejai said...

i wouldn't mind having a crown slipped onto my finger!

thingy said...

This is really touching. Wonderful.

christopher said...

Interesting atmosphere in this one. I too thought a magical woman drinking four cupsa and then going back to bed but there may be much more to this story.

JJ Roa Rodriguez said...

nicely said... nicely composed...

i like it...

JJRod'z

Martin said...

"...he took off his crown
and placed it on her finger." Very nice.

Jinksy said...

Bit of a daydreamer, then Deborah? Loved your dreamboat king. ♥

Kathe W. said...

wow- it had to be decaf! Lovely little king- .

Mamma has spoken said...

Aw he put his crown on her finger, cute story!

brenda w said...

Excellent write! Sweet and engaging. I rather like your king. :)

Roy Schulze said...

I liked the image of him putting his crown on her finger. My Magpie 86 entry is Cepheus.

Clipped Wings said...

I love it!

Christine said...

love the fantasy in this

Linda said...

Well done...again!

Hazel said...

Adorable read. Coffee, they say, can sometimes put you to sleep instead of keeping you awake.

Muhammad Israr said...

wow...what a wonderful night... and magical words that you describe the whole situation...brilliant :)

Deborah said...

Thank you everyone for stopping by and for your lovely comments :o) xxx

Jim Swindle said...

Very creative. I really like it.

Berowne said...

Very good writing; enjoyable.

Isabel Doyle said...

what was she stirring into that coffee?

Brian Miller said...

wow this is truly a magical tale....gave me a smile that he was there for her...

Laurie Kolp said...

Lovely spin on the prompt... I could use a king like that.

Mama Zen said...

I love your take on the prompt! Magical.

Kathy Bischoping said...

The use of gems is a gem!

Suzy Q said...

A lovely read. I love the meander I took through this tale :)

Helen said...

Your Magpie had a sleepy, dreamy, nice rhythym to it --- nice!

Reflections said...

So this would be that really dreamy state when we are not quite sure if its real or not... smiles....

Deborah said...

Thank you for your lovely comments everyone :o) x

Lydia said...

I just fell in love with The Little King in the image and now that you have brought his personality to life, I love him all the more. The touch with the crown on her finger is sublime. Great magpie.

Deborah said...

:o) Thank you Lydia x

Rashmi said...

ha....wonderful tale...

The Old Raven said...

Oh my ... you have made him out to be such a sweet guy. I really liked him!

oldegg said...

Utterly captivating. Some in their loneliness talk to themselves, she however created a fantasy world to cope. A great piece of work.

Leslie said...

that is just the right sweet for a romance...

Deborah said...

Thank you so much, it's lovely to read your comments :o) x

jabblog said...

I liked the crown on her finger - it worked like a sleeping draught!

HyperCRYPTICal said...

A truly wonderful Magpie.

Anna :o]

Deborah said...

Thank you jabblog and Hyper xx :o)

Brigid said...

A lovely dreamy Magpie, I love the touch of magic in it.

Deborah said...

Thank you Brigid :o) x

Lena said...

Awwww! The teeny King of Hearts. You can't help but love him!

Deborah said...

:O) Thanks Lena x

Stafford Ray said...

Loved it. What a wonderful imaginary friend.

Deborah said...

Thank you Stafford :o) x

Selma said...

This is so cute. Reminds me of A.A. Milne. I Love it!

Deborah said...

Thanks Selma xxx

Dave King said...

Super tale told beautifully.

Deborah said...

Thank you Dave :o) x

company profile said...

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Deborah said...

Thank you company profile :o)